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The Last Smile on Earth by ~iAes:iconiAes:



The last smile on Earth
was small and bright and honest
amid chaos and horror
as the world caved in upon itself
and man killed man and woman and
child
and land and sea and mountain;

in a world of dishonesty
the last smile was sincere

as man tore out the seams of
his carefully sewn world
the smile worked on the edges with a needle
and thread
hoping
hoping
as death himself fell under man's sword
as well
as the earth knelt and wept and begged
the smile lifted the world's chin and shone

as man killed his friends, his wife, his daughters and
sons
as he burned down his house and shop
and town
the smile stopped
and watched
and grieved
but never faltered

as man tainted the only perfect thing he'd ever been granted
as man was damned
what a shame
what a waste
the smile begged redemption

when you fight for everyone
and everyone fights
and no one knows anymore
whether they're fighting for a cause or life
the divide vanishes and humanity is left alone
with its flaws
all you can really do
is die
smiling.
©2008-2009 ~iAes
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My entry for :iconmattiello: 's contest "The Betterment For Humanity."
There you are, darling!

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Very nice, perhaps my favorite.

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There were 2 of smiles as well! you should read the other~ It also spoke of a smile, but in a much different light.

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Oh, thank you so much!! I'm very glad you like it. <3
Anything in particular that sticks out at you?
There were? Oh, cool!
Do you perhaps have the link?
I think when I read it I found that I was not trying to finish it, that merely I was enjoying reading it. That is very important. I'm sure you've been there before~ reading to finish (well i've gotten this far, I mind as well...) In the end the theme was nice and I was impressed with the progression. You kept the reader involved without tiring him on rhyme or riddle, yet you seemed to maintain something fun and inviting.

Since you asked of course.

Blisk.

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I was also impressed with how you bordered cle'che weather or not that was your intention. Often (like my own work) I find that when doing something like this, a contest, one tries to go to far and often falls not short of cle'che instead of earnest.

anyhow what do I know.

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Proudly a Member of the Writer's Club [link]
Thank you--what a wonderful interpretation! <3
I really appreciate thorough descriptions!
What do you know?
A lot!
Thanks. :}
Congratulations on second place!

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Religion comforts the afflicted and afflicts the comfortable.

Worker of the world unite! You have nothing to lose but your chains!

Porta den man di Dios, porta den man di mi. Todo el mundo, hasi semper fuerte e nos is por biba e din cielo.

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